Emmett
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"She's a riddle, she's a child! She's a headache, she's an angel, she's a girl!" -The Sound Of Music
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Post by Emmett on Nov 21, 2009 7:49:55 GMT -8
Emmett is only a little like you. She may be popular, or she may not, but no matter what she's impossible to ignore; she stands out... just the way you always wanted to. There's never been anything special about her that she could see; boy, is she in for a surprise. She's got no emotional scars to speak of. And she's gotten no slack from you.
In general, you care deeply about Emmett, but you're smart enough to let her stand on her own, without burdening her with your personal fantasies or propping her up with idealization and over-dramatization. Emmett is a healthy character with a promising career ahead of her.
Score Breakdown I Love Her, I Let Her Go 7 Yo! 14 Plain Jane 0 Healthy as a Horse 0 Momma HATES Her! 0 Total: 21
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Nyatta Leigh Kigarra-Morte
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"Not speaking is the flower." -Japanese proverb. Looks like the Japanese knew their stuff.
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Post by Nyatta Leigh Kigarra-Morte on Nov 21, 2009 14:12:43 GMT -8
Nyatta is suspiciously similar to you as you'd like to be. She isn't really very cool: she blends into crowds, she hangs out on the fringes at parties, and wearing shades after dark makes her run into things. She may have sometimes thought that she was special, or destined for greater things, but probably dismissed the idea as a fantasy. She's had more than her fair share of hard knocks, and probably spends more time than she ought moaning about it. And she's gotten no slack from you.
You may have let yourself get a little too close to Nyatta. Maybe she's you as you wish you were, or maybe you're just afraid no one will like her and are trying to give her a free ride. Have some confidence in your writing! Nyatta is a good character. Give her room to be herself before you stifle her.
Score Breakdown She's Got My Nose 19 You Mean Plaid Is Out? 8 I'm Destined For What? 11 Angst R Us 13 Momma HATES Her! 2 Total: 53
Points to be addressed.
"...or maybe you're just afraid no one will like her and are trying to give her a free ride." Uh, no? *Snickers.* >.>
"Have some confidence in your writing!" I have plenty of confidence in my writing.
This test was amusing, but those two lines irked me.
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Decora
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OOC: Andrea.[C01:BBBBBB]
Posts: 166
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Post by Decora on Nov 21, 2009 23:58:49 GMT -8
Decora is only a little like you. She isn't really very cool: she blends into crowds, she hangs out on the fringes at parties, and wearing shades after dark makes her run into things. She may have sometimes thought that she was special, or destined for greater things, but probably dismissed the idea as a fantasy. She's come in for her share of hurt, but gotten off with minor damage. And you've been sparing with the free handouts: whatever she gains, she's worked for.
In general, you care deeply about Decora, but you're smart enough to let her stand on her own, without burdening her with your personal fantasies or propping her up with idealization and over-dramatization. Decora is a healthy character with a promising career ahead of her.
ETA: Score Breakdown Do I Know This Guy? 2 You Mean Plaid Is Out? 6 I'm Destined For What? 8 Can't Complain 8 Spare the Rod and Spoil the Child 6 Total: 30
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Itami
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Post by Itami on Nov 22, 2009 3:39:09 GMT -8
Itami is suspiciously similar to you as you'd like to be. He is so impossibly hip that he has difficulty seeing over his own pelvis; he'll probably die young, but damn, will it have been a good life. He always knew he was special, destined for great things - and probably made sure everyone else knew it too. He's had more than his fair share of hard knocks, and probably spends more time than he ought moaning about it. And you, his creator, have spoilt him rotten and given him everything he wanted.
You identify far too heavily with Itami, and defend him from all sides, never realizing that in your quest to make him perfect you are alienating your readers. Back off and take a break. Try writing the story from the viewpoint of a different character, one you have less sympathy with... or writing a different story and coming back to this one.
Score Breakdown He's Got My Nose 12 James Dean, James Dean... 25 Hey, Wanna See My Crown-Shaped Birthmark? 13 Angst R Us 14 What A Brat! 32 Total: 96
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